Tuesday, May 4, 2010

O.N.E. A.M.A.Z.I.N.G. T.H.I.N.G.

I was hurt-very vulnerable, broken, and confounded. Would I be able to survive and not fall down into a deep pit of desperation and meaningless existence? He was leaving without a reason. He tried to explain but it did not make a difference. Is there ever a right a reason for smashing a heart and cracking it open to bleed? He had stated a decision and walked away, leaving me rooted to deal with the aftermath.

I stood there transfixed. My feet of lead would not move. His words had carved me in stone. And then slowly my tears started flowing, lacerating my wounds. I did not want to create a spectacle in public. So I started walking back; silently crying on my way back to the hotel. I did not know when it happened. A hand solidly clasped my hand and filled the spaces between my fingers. I looked at the face of my best friend. He walked me back like that without saying a word. And I did not die on the way.



(A short story inspired by trust:))

20 comments:

Mahuya said...

Oh my God, Shweta, I can actually visualize the whole thing ... You have excelled yourself this time with the blank verse. Every time you write something new, its unique and so different from the rest of what you've written.

It filled my heart ... muah!

Witness said...

Thx Mahuya:)i m glad u like my attempt!

D2 said...

I'm so sorry, but I didn't quite understand. Is the "best friend" a metaphor?

Witness said...

No D2. It's the best friend literally.

tinymiyo said...

i love this, thought provoking too.

Witness said...

Thx Miyo:)glad it touched a chord.

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Witness said...

@Dotmusic:thx:)

kitty<3 said...

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Witness said...

@kitty<3 :Thx:)glad you could connect.

林國庭網路自創小說'集 said...

I imagine a world without death, and perhaps where I can easily find answers to life processes, at least in faith I believe God is my best choice.

Feeling Just Right said...

Hmmm. Gad this best friend came back. Happy stories steal my heart.

Mo said...

The importance of friends. They'll always be there.

Dumela said...

This is great. Even in the darkest hour there is always light somewhere.

Twinky said...

1 night stand

zubin said...

Awesome. And welcome to the world of prose, finally!! U r very good :).

YoungNovember said...

I like to read poetry and then identify with the story. I like this because I recognize the feeling...

You write very well
x

Witness said...

@FJR:happy:)
@Mo:true
@Dumela:Touche
@YoungNovember:Thx Again:)
@Zubin:thx for encouraging:)

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Witness said...

thx Joven:)